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  • Folding story shouldn't start with just the letter A. It has a bad reputation. The sentence should read: Puck the Engineer had a brilliant idea for an experiment starting with A.

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  • Then you will be ending with A, that is just as bad. You need to work A in naturally so that it doesn't seem like a foreign idea. Try:Puck's Experiment A was brilliant engineering.

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  • From the sidewalk cafe point of view, your suggestion is yesterday's grounds. The story should have a beginning like: Puck was brilliant but his engineering was an experiment.

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  • But for all his brilliance of course, Puck wasn't an engineer. It should come to no surprise that his experiment blew up in his face -- quite literally unfortunately.

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  • But for all his brilliance of course, Puck wasn't an engineer. It should come to no surprise that his experiment blew up in his face -- quite literally unfortunately.

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  • But for all his brilliance of course, Puck wasn't an engineer. It should come to no surprise that his experiment blew up in his face -- quite literally unfortunately.

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  • He didn't die at least, but from that day forward, Puck was half the man he used to be. And perhaps as a result of this, he experienced random bouts of explosive anger. One day

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  • he lost it screaming "Puck this pucking muck of a puckwasher!" But it was too late his little experiment with with the Puckwasher had gone dreadfully wrong and Puck wasn't about to

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  • just quit and say "Puck it". So he grabbed another puck, his hockey stick, and left to meet the boys!

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1 Comments

  1. LordVacuity Sep 08 2016 @ 21:54

    This story wasn't started by Arthur Fonzirelli?

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