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The volcano erupted bleeding black ash across

  • The volcano erupted bleeding black ash across the tropical island and there in the cloud was a figure, flying it was Israel 'IZ' Kamakawiwo'ole with a cape and a ukulele

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  • His bulk momentarily blotted the sun. Iz, Super-Ukulele man, was flying somewhere over the rainbow. Using the power of good vibes he hoped to stop the eruption.

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  • Yes,his "bulk" was so bulky that Iz,Super-Ukelele Man couldn't afford the risk of getting of.His ejaculation,or the eruption of Mount Bulk as he refered to it,have caused damage in

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  • several hundreds of cakes over the months. But how can one possibly mention Bulk without bringing to light his inseparable best friend, Skull? The duo was known in Angel Grove to

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  • hold hands for days at a time. It was disturbing. S&B (Skull and Bulk) were developing a new line of cake fillings and frostings and were putting on about five pounds a day just

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  • to see what would happen. The bodies has begun to pile up in the garden, fusing nicely with the sculptures. "Love is all there is," Timmy told his sister. "Your glands are only

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  • stony weights, holding you back, bringing you down. Don't you want to be free?" Timmy's sister did want to be free so he prepared the home surgery table. First, he

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  • had her put on his scub mask & discharged empty miracle whip cans into the snorkel. After anethstesia, Timmy layed out his "instruments" for his sister's operation: an electric too

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  • dlefop, ain iron criggle, and 14 juggerputs.Timmy hypnotized his sister and began the operation. A nip here, a tuck there, and a few strategically placed juggerputs and voila

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  • he had successfully attached a dog to his sister's hip. Of course, this made it more difficult for her to find clothes that would fit but it was more practical than walking it on a

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3 Comments

  1. inatick Nov 25 2012 @ 22:52

    Edit... Please put a full stop after 'It' and ignore 'On a'.

  2. SlimWhitman Nov 26 2012 @ 04:02

    No sweat, happens to everyone once in a while. Last folds are tricky. I can see what you wanted to say and so the idea comes across. Regarding struggles to fit punchy folds into 180 characters . . . I often start having a good idea towards the middle of a fold and develop it, only to discover that it cannot be finished. Then I start remove parts that are unnecessary for the idea and prune the filler words like "like", "that", "the" "proceeded to" and "ofcourse". Then I reread the last part of the previous fold followed by my fold to check for editing errors if time allows. In this case removing "ofcourse" makes room for " leash" at the end. You could even replace ". Ofcourse this made" with "making" if something more elaborate was missing. Ofcourse if its not a last fold, it is often nice to NOT complete the idea or at least the sentence and let others surprise you... See you in Foldspace!

  3. inatick Nov 26 2012 @ 10:03

    Thanks for such positive feedback. It would be handy if the website had an app as it's tricky to navigate on my iPhone. I only just started so hopefully I'm not making too many mistakes. Practice practice practice...

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